My Poem: Comments please?

It seems like you just wrote down any line that sounded like a good name for a metal band. I can't find any serious meaning to it...and I was able to find meaning in Eliot's Wasteland. As far as technical ability, there's no rhyme or meter. Sure, there are individual bits of rhyme and meter here and there, but they don't really count if you can't continue them. It really sounds like you came up with twenty-six cool lines (I'm not including "my sounds are pierced with swords," because it's nonsense, or "I am green. Am grounded yet?" because it's both nonsensical and ungrammatical), put them in a hat, and pulled them out one by one.